I don't know if it will make the final edit

[ksmith]

"She looked up to find Feyó and Dathim standing before her, severe and silent and dressed formally in flowing trousers and overrobes, like the grimmest of angels come to claim the remains of her soul."

"She" being Jani...

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[hoosier-red.livejournal.com]

Okay, I must REALLY need sleep, because I saw something completely different when I initially read the title of this post. Somehow, the e and d of "edit" turned into a c and an l.

Which gave the post a completely different spin, of course.

[kristine-smith.livejournal.com]

I have no words. Not even consonant blends.

[torrilin.livejournal.com]

That's a *clear* image. If it needs to go, it needs to go. But oooh, nice clear image of tall Haarin and death waiting.

[kristine-smith.livejournal.com]

And it was an unplanned set-up for an unplanned following scene. The need for the set-up occurred to me yesterday during the lunchtime writing. The scene itself was written last night.

It was a minor derailment. I had meant for the next scene to be something else, but I needed to set the stage for a decision down the road, and realized that this was as good a time as any...

[galeni.livejournal.com]

Jani really can't stay out of trouble, can she.

Cool.

[kristine-smith.livejournal.com]

Especially when she goes looking for it...