Arguments

[ksmith]

I'm writing an argument scene. I thought it would flow, but so far it's been damned difficult. It's a John/Jani scene, the start of which I snipped yesterday. They love one another, but they're two strong individuals, each wishing the other would just set aside some irritating personal qualities and not ask so many questions.

I know John's not a favorite. Some readers think he's creepy. A control freak (unlike Jani, who's so easy-going). Yes, he behaved in ways unethical, but I've always seen him as Jani's equal in ways the other men in her life never have been and never will be. Just as intelligent. Just as focused. Just as capable of building something from nothing. In his own way, yes, as unethical--both he and Jani adhere to a code that doesn't always have all that much in common with accepted ideas of law and morality.

He knows what she's capable of. And it scares and worries him. He refuses to just go along for the ride. And to convey that clearly without stating it on-the-nose and without belaboring each and every point while at the same time conveying that maybe, just maybe, there are other things going on here...

This stream-of-consciousness moment brought to you by a writer in search of distraction on a rainy Sunday afternoon.

Comments

[equesgal.livejournal.com]

YES! That's the same thing that happens to me. LOL I go back and read what I've written to find:

He: "blah blah blah"

She: "Wha wha wha"

Nice bit of description and angst and then...

He: "Yes, but you do realize that blah blah blah."

She: "I know, but seriously wha wha wha."