Flying %^&$#!!*$@
Aug. 19th, 2006 09:41 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
ksmithThe hell with characterization. The hell with plot. Theme? We spit on Theme. ptooie!
It's the business that gets you every frellin' time. Is the lightstick still lit, or did Lucien already bag it? If he already bagged it, how can Jani see his expression? Ok, take that line and move it down a few paragraphs. Is it raining or isn't it? Is it blowing though the breaks in the windows, sending dead leaves clattering across the floor? It isn't? Should it be?
Is Jani wearing a weatherall? Why not--it's raining. Shouldn't we mention that she's wet? Does she get her hands on a weatherall? Does Dieter bring her one? Oh good--does she wear it into the library? If not, when the hell does she take it off?
Freakin' bloody transitions business hate hate stabbity hate...
It's the business that gets you every frellin' time. Is the lightstick still lit, or did Lucien already bag it? If he already bagged it, how can Jani see his expression? Ok, take that line and move it down a few paragraphs. Is it raining or isn't it? Is it blowing though the breaks in the windows, sending dead leaves clattering across the floor? It isn't? Should it be?
Is Jani wearing a weatherall? Why not--it's raining. Shouldn't we mention that she's wet? Does she get her hands on a weatherall? Does Dieter bring her one? Oh good--does she wear it into the library? If not, when the hell does she take it off?
Freakin' bloody transitions business hate hate stabbity hate...
